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Re: A short Lojban text with English translations
- To: John Cowan <marob.masa.com!cowan>
- Subject: Re: A short Lojban text with English translations
- From: "Arthur W. Protin Jr." (GC-ACCURATE) <pica.army.mil!protin>
- Date: Tue, 29 May 90 11:22:50 EDT
I can't comment on the lojban directly but I feel that the
pidgin loses something. "is-something-cooked" is important except
as an instance of "affected by the fire" and it should be chosen
for poetic properties (like rhyming with "BIC") and likewise
"your last something-eaten" is to be an instance of "a central
part of your anatomy" but again chosen poetically ("meal" .vs. "steel").
My fears in your translation are that it is not clear that the
"last something-eaten" will still be in them when the weapon passes
through it and that Kaa is not on the menu.