From nobody@digitalkingdom.org Wed Jan 17 12:51:14 2007 Received: with ECARTIS (v1.0.0; list lojban-beginners); Wed, 17 Jan 2007 12:51:15 -0800 (PST) Received: from nobody by chain.digitalkingdom.org with local (Exim 4.63) (envelope-from ) id 1H7HkX-00049Q-Gs for lojban-beginners-real@lojban.org; Wed, 17 Jan 2007 12:51:14 -0800 Received: from elasmtp-scoter.atl.sa.earthlink.net ([209.86.89.67]) by chain.digitalkingdom.org with esmtp (Exim 4.63) (envelope-from ) id 1H7HkQ-000491-9I for lojban-beginners@lojban.org; Wed, 17 Jan 2007 12:51:13 -0800 DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; q=dns; c=nofws; s=dk20050327; d=mindspring.com; b=hhSLuJuQDX0u1TIMrn+XEwYb4tEj5FK0sPIoIvziul6R6xgoELgM+jBoHGic93od; h=Received:Mime-Version:To:Message-Id:Content-Type:From:Subject:Date:X-Mailer:X-ELNK-Trace:X-Originating-IP; Received: from [68.164.88.37] (helo=[10.0.1.3]) by elasmtp-scoter.atl.sa.earthlink.net with asmtp (Exim 4.34) id 1H7HkO-0006kH-GA for lojban-beginners@lojban.org; Wed, 17 Jan 2007 15:51:04 -0500 Mime-Version: 1.0 (Apple Message framework v752.3) To: lojban-beginners@lojban.org Message-Id: <8A34D4EB-0E3C-478E-87D8-BB7443624363@mindspring.com> Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary=Apple-Mail-1--366153395 From: Cortesi Subject: [lojban-beginners] POM lines 1 Date: Wed, 17 Jan 2007 12:51:31 -0800 X-ELNK-Trace: c82619e33d1ea3219c7f779228e2f6aeda0071232e20db4df120088e6fb2c06f10129f788e640614350badd9bab72f9c350badd9bab72f9c350badd9bab72f9c X-Originating-IP: 68.164.88.37 X-Spam-Score: -2.4 X-Spam-Score-Int: -23 X-Spam-Bar: -- X-archive-position: 3892 X-ecartis-version: Ecartis v1.0.0 Sender: lojban-beginners-bounce@lojban.org Errors-to: lojban-beginners-bounce@lojban.org X-original-sender: dcortesi@mindspring.com Precedence: bulk Reply-to: lojban-beginners@lojban.org X-list: lojban-beginners --Apple-Mail-1--366153395 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Content-Type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII; delsp=yes; format=flowed OK, encouraged by the lack of anybody saying no, here is a first bit of dialog to critique. (The explanation of POM and its current state is at http://www.tassos- oak.com/tempp/barsoomian.html) The audience's first sight of the princess, Dejah Thoris, is a scene that does not appear in the book. She is discovered on the deck of her flying yacht. Her crew chief approaches her carrying a toasty- looking chunk of machinery and the following dialog occurs: JARL THON coi noltru ti'u ga'i nai le ti nenli'i cupra a'onai spofu SUPER: Princess, this ray generator is hopelessly broken (O Princess, (meekness) the this-here energy-ray producer (hope- denial) is-broken ) ma'a na kakne lo ca'a cupra le lafti SUPER: We cannot continue to generate lifting force. (we-all not are-able-to the-really continued generation-of the- lifting ... does this need nu after lo?) DEJAH THORIS lo zu'o vofli cu renvi fi ma? SUPER: How long can we keep flying? (the-truly activity-of flying, endures how-long?) JARL THON le go'i mleca le cacra SUPER: Less than an hour. (The what-you-said is-less-than [default-1] hour) --Apple-Mail-1--366153395 Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Content-Type: text/html; charset=ISO-8859-1 OK, encouraged by the lack of = anybody saying no, here is a first bit of dialog to critique.
(The = explanation of POM and its current state is at=A0http://www.tassos= -oak.com/tempp/barsoomian.html)

The audience's first sight of the princess, Dejah Thoris, is a = scene that does not appear in the book. She is discovered on the deck of = her flying yacht. Her crew chief approaches her carrying a = toasty-looking chunk of machinery and the following dialog = occurs:

JARL THON

coi noltru ti'u ga'i nai le ti nenli'i cupra a'onai = spofu

SUPER: Princess, this ray generator is hopelessly = broken

(O Princess, = (meekness) the this-here energy-ray producer (hope-denial) is-broken = )

ma'a na kakne lo ca'a cupra le = lafti

SUPER: We cannot continue to generate lifting = force.

(we-all not = are-able-to the-really continued generation-of the-lifting ... does this = need nu after lo?)

DEJAH THORIS

lo zu'o vofli cu renvi fi = ma?

SUPER: How long can we keep flying?

(the-truly = activity-of flying, endures how-long?)

JARL = THON

le go'i mleca le = cacra

SUPER: Less than an hour.

(The what-you-said is-less-than [default-1] = hour)




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