=A0 But, back to the original topic (as usual, just gettin= g to it, a month later), a few comments:

=A0 * =A0I note= that you use "tcikonia" in your translation, but "crane&quo= t; in your English title of this thread. =A0tcikonia (storks) (a word which= you yourself =A0created) are not cranes. =A0They are not even in the same = avian order (perhaps cranes are za'e cipnrgru?). =A0That being said, yo= u are free to use "tcikonia" because other versions of the fable = use "stork". =A0Just commenting on the disconnect=A0

=A0* =A0stylistic: rather than ".... nupre tu'a lo velne'u= " =A0I'd've probably just gone with "....nupre lo nu cnem= u". =A0Why extract out one concrete sumti of "to reward", th= an tu'a it back to a abstraction because that's what the x2 of nupr= e requires? =A0Why not simply say that L promised to reward T, thereby stay= ing in the realm of bridi, and not having to do a conversion on cnemu? =A0B= ut as I said, just stylistic, not substantive.

=A0 * similarly, I'm not to fond of "lo velne&= #39;u poi xagrai va'u loi palci" =A0To imply that evil are ever be= neficial? =A0Eh. =A0I'd go with something more like "lo velne'= u be fo lo palci be'o poi xagrai"

=A0 =A0

=A0 =A0Keep up the good work, and I second se= lckiku's "=A0= mi steci nelci lo za'i pixra jib= ni kei .e lo za'i melbi lerfu"

=A0 =A0 =A0 --gejyspa

On Sun, Jan 27, 2013 at 5:36 AM, Remo = Dentato <rdentato@gmail.com> wrote:

I just posted the= translation of "The Wolf and the Crane". Ninth in the series {lo= 'i xanri lisri fi la ,esop.}.

As always, feedback and comments are much appreciated.

mu'o mi'e la .remod.

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