Message-Id: <m0nTH3J-0000suC@snark.thyrsus.com>
From: cowan@snark.thyrsus.com (John Cowan)
Subject: Re: TECH: Lujvo Place structure paper
To: nsn@mullian.ee.mu.oz.au
Date: Mon, 1 Mar 1993 15:25:28 -0500 (EST)
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Looks >excellent< overall.  A few nits, mostly on formatting issues,
since this paper will probably appear in the reference grammar as well.

> 1. Introduction

I prefer "Introductory", to avoid confusion with the general Introduction
of the whole book.

> la blabyzdan. cu gerku befa la spat. bei la sanktbernard. be'o zdani le
> merli'e --- [1.1]

Please use the style of my papers, thus:

1.1)	la blabydzn. cu gerku [...]
	Bloohouse is a dog [...]

> Obviously, if we're talking dog kennels,

.u'u mi na tavla gerku zdani vau zo'o

> selected must be ordered in such a way, that the user who is unfamiliar

Lose this comma.

> reproducable and intelligible without needing to rely on context. Neither

Officially, that's "reproduceable", to avoid the suggestion of "ducal".
A losing word in print, IMHO.

> This is why this chapter does not have the same
> force as other sections of the dictionary, and does not represent official
> LLG policy.

Lose this sentence.  The paper may get used in za'u places.

> None the less, they deserve attention. If a desired place

"Nonetheless".

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