From: Logical Language Group <lojbab>
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Subject: Re: TEXT: pemci
Date: Thu, 1 Dec 1994 17:36:12 -0500 (EST)
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>      lo ni fa le vi nanmu cu pinji
>      vau bancu le lakne zei linji
>      .i zmabra .i gohu
>      cu mukti .oirohu
>      le spepli be lo cmadesminji

In addition to the bugs pointed out by Goran, I would add that "go'u" is
no sumti; you want "le nu go'u" or maybe "de'u" (so either meter or rhyme
is lost).  Otherwise the poem isn't grammatical.

-- 
John Cowan		sharing account <lojbab@access.digex.net> for now
		e'osai ko sarji la lojban.