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la greg cusku di'e

>ni'o ty puca'aki zvati le canlu be le plini poi se tcita li ciremu bi'i li
>cicino

I think {kuspe} rather than {canlo} here, and maybe {plinycma}
for "asteroid". And using {bi'i} is cheating! {le kuspe be lei
plinycma po'u li 325 joi li 326 joi li 327 joi li 328 joi li 329
joi li 330}

>.i le nolraitru nobli zutse fi'o dasni le nukni je rankre lo ritli stizu 
>poi
>sampu jeku'i banli

{cu nobli zutse}

>.i sei ty. sevzi ke preti cusku ki'u ma ri ka'e tcita be mi dunda va'o lenu 
>mi noroi ca'a se viska ri

{ri} doesn't have an antecedent here. I suggest using {ta}.

>ni'o ty na djuno le du'u ga'a lo'e nolraitru le munje cu sampu traji ki'u 
>le
>za'i ro remna se turni

{cu se turni}

>ni'o ko zo'i klama tezu'e lenu mi do semau viska sei le nolraitru noi mutce
>jgira lenu nolraitru be da

{... cu cusku}
{be} is not needed. I might say {le nu uo nolraitru ba'e da}

>ni'o le cmalu turni cu kanla siska le ka ri zutse ce'u

I would say {sisku lo'e se zutse

>.ibo ki'u leza'i ty tatpi kei ty moklu ke ganro kargau cei broda
>.i le nu broda cu na'e drani nu tarti va'o lenu lo nolraitru zvati sei ny
>cusku e'anaicaiga'i

I don't think the king should use {broda} as defined by the
narrator. It would not make sense for him to use that word.
How about {sipfru} for "yawn"?

>.iseki'ubo sei le nolraitru ty. cusku

{fi ty}

>.e'oga'i ko broda

Perhaps {mi do minde le nu do sipfru} would be better, since
the original has an explicit "je t'ordonne".

>.ibo mi ze'u lo
>nanca be li so'e na zgana lenu da broda

I'd use {li so'i}.

>.ibo leinu broda jai cinri mi
>.ibo.o'ocu'i ko za'uroi broda

{za'ure'u}

>************
>pff, this is too heavy for me
>--

That's the next line, isn't it?
"C,a m'intimide... je ne peux plus..."  :)

i e'e do ja'a kakne

mu'o mi'e xorxes


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