From lojban+bncCJ2UzZHuDRD_9tLkBBoEUcuIlQ@googlegroups.com Sat Sep 18 06:16:00 2010 Received: from mail-wy0-f189.google.com ([74.125.82.189]) by chain.digitalkingdom.org with esmtp (Exim 4.72) (envelope-from ) id 1OwxGm-00023h-9d; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:16:00 -0700 Received: by wyb40 with SMTP id 40sf689944wyb.16 for ; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:49 -0700 (PDT) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=googlegroups.com; s=beta; h=domainkey-signature:received:x-beenthere:received:received:received :received:received-spf:received:mime-version:received:received :in-reply-to:references:date:message-id:subject:from:to :x-original-sender:x-original-authentication-results:reply-to :precedence:mailing-list:list-id:list-post:list-help:list-archive :sender:list-subscribe:list-unsubscribe:content-type :content-transfer-encoding; bh=oeD4l2NrNroGeEhCAZP8V9M19fF6iJqfHpKe1Y40iLQ=; b=C+ZyNXrgRM97k8gVTxNh31YSMsrDs6KUHvQbC7jv8iFDS1Hf+2o5etmkHhbLvq0Ifc XhvsakIZ2HhsNN+2suzwqstTXv42WYYiTKVPrRli/feRTI97xgDUM8GmWTQJR1KkeVTz edW7FR1OHgC8u5y2/qA9tkcjip80TeOQTpoL8= DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; c=nofws; d=googlegroups.com; s=beta; h=x-beenthere:received-spf:mime-version:in-reply-to:references:date :message-id:subject:from:to:x-original-sender :x-original-authentication-results:reply-to:precedence:mailing-list :list-id:list-post:list-help:list-archive:sender:list-subscribe :list-unsubscribe:content-type:content-transfer-encoding; b=koNyM2ZyTr61Hp9ck1mPhZEyvrny5ROjcDoNNiOprrrQpcIEfpvM5DtXMjD7zNL4s7 ZRHXlGfgwNpgnXCp9ygB1qB3VOCGzxT6U9cbHEkU04hBoCfP2TokBPx4TFrHQ4pyZokG 9ru3wDpJkvr0tlCf1Z/PReF3Ex7PbjzNB0nPg= Received: by 10.216.145.214 with SMTP id p64mr1295321wej.27.1284815743526; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:43 -0700 (PDT) X-BeenThere: lojban@googlegroups.com Received: by 10.216.198.162 with SMTP id v34ls1969403wen.3.p; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:42 -0700 (PDT) Received: by 10.216.178.201 with SMTP id f51mr360550wem.8.1284815742342; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:42 -0700 (PDT) Received: by 10.216.178.201 with SMTP id f51mr360549wem.8.1284815742315; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:42 -0700 (PDT) Received: from mail-wy0-f174.google.com (mail-wy0-f174.google.com [74.125.82.174]) by gmr-mx.google.com with ESMTP id v4si1874099weq.9.2010.09.18.06.15.41; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:41 -0700 (PDT) Received-SPF: pass (google.com: domain of jjllambias@gmail.com designates 74.125.82.174 as permitted sender) client-ip=74.125.82.174; Received: by wyf22 with SMTP id 22so4275141wyf.33 for ; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:41 -0700 (PDT) MIME-Version: 1.0 Received: by 10.216.182.202 with SMTP id o52mr5647832wem.29.1284815741170; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:41 -0700 (PDT) Received: by 10.227.151.203 with HTTP; Sat, 18 Sep 2010 06:15:41 -0700 (PDT) In-Reply-To: References: Date: Sat, 18 Sep 2010 10:15:41 -0300 Message-ID: Subject: Re: [lojban] [update] le virnu smani blozeile'a From: =?ISO-8859-1?Q?Jorge_Llamb=EDas?= To: lojban@googlegroups.com X-Original-Sender: jjllambias@gmail.com X-Original-Authentication-Results: gmr-mx.google.com; spf=pass (google.com: domain of jjllambias@gmail.com designates 74.125.82.174 as permitted sender) smtp.mail=jjllambias@gmail.com; dkim=pass (test mode) header.i=@gmail.com Reply-To: lojban@googlegroups.com Precedence: list Mailing-list: list lojban@googlegroups.com; contact lojban+owners@googlegroups.com List-ID: List-Post: , List-Help: , List-Archive: Sender: lojban@googlegroups.com List-Subscribe: , List-Unsubscribe: , Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1 Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable On Fri, Sep 17, 2010 at 5:23 PM, Remo Dentato wrote: > I posted a new version of "le virnu smani blozeile'a" here: > > =A0 http://dentato.com/the-brave-monkey-pirate-jbo-review.pdf > > I hope I addressed all the comments you gave me. > > I'm sure there are still mistakes and things to be fixed, thanks for > any comment you may have. 1- I still don't understand "lo (...) lanci be tu'i le kampu kumfa". How can the living-room be the site of the flag if they are in a store? And flags hardly have inalienable locations, since they are easily movable objects, not like a monument or a mountain. 2- You don't really need "kei" in "le nu skorbuti [kei] .a zo'e" (this appears twice) 3- ".ije my le nu klama lo mikce briju kei skicu le patfu" You need "kei ku" there or just use "cu" instead. 4- "... gi'e cpare lo pojma'a noi culno lo fagri rumro'i / gi'e ..." You need to end that "noi" with "ku'o". 5- I would use "tolcri" instead of "facki". He didn't find out facts about the mafcre, he found the mafcre. 6- The braxiura mafcre uses two unnecessary "ku"'s. mu'o mi'e xorxes --=20 You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "= lojban" group. To post to this group, send email to lojban@googlegroups.com. To unsubscribe from this group, send email to lojban+unsubscribe@googlegrou= ps.com. For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/lojban= ?hl=3Den.