From lojban+bncCNTPpI2KGxCivOXkBBoEl4VGbg@googlegroups.com Tue Sep 21 18:39:11 2010 Received: from mail-pw0-f61.google.com ([209.85.160.61]) by chain.digitalkingdom.org with esmtp (Exim 4.72) (envelope-from ) id 1OyEIQ-00053C-5M; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 18:39:11 -0700 Received: by pwj6 with SMTP id 6sf16147pwj.16 for ; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 18:38:48 -0700 (PDT) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=googlegroups.com; s=beta; h=domainkey-signature:received:x-beenthere:received:received:received :received:received-spf:x-authority-analysis:x-cloudmark-score :x-originating-ip:received:received:from:to:subject:date:user-agent :references:in-reply-to:mime-version:message-id:x-original-sender :x-original-authentication-results:reply-to:precedence:mailing-list :list-id:list-post:list-help:list-archive:sender:list-subscribe :list-unsubscribe:content-type:content-disposition; bh=whgIrVnw+Lnwm9udfxBxWyKmBdMQ0CWi4DczQtypQcM=; b=Te6Ji+PXvH4HUp4r0O82XC4DLx3pNlhxNBAWPyVr9URxA4PCpNdoN6GGUaWOXfBJ0W Sq77S7GlSyQBr1FNB1w5RoSd5u00oYC2mGI5xrMXUSTzB4cJk8ammm7t1q/rzFcvVbah k+iHE24LAdRHfRZcyAWJP1p9hpeS2+HvJs8TI= DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; c=nofws; d=googlegroups.com; s=beta; h=x-beenthere:received-spf:x-authority-analysis:x-cloudmark-score :x-originating-ip:from:to:subject:date:user-agent:references :in-reply-to:mime-version:message-id:x-original-sender :x-original-authentication-results:reply-to:precedence:mailing-list :list-id:list-post:list-help:list-archive:sender:list-subscribe :list-unsubscribe:content-type:content-disposition; b=CCPZXaIq5egaBahu6ybAKPwtM+oqmQupW8CwIZUnVm5Vj+1M/X1MO+PYKFU/Qbq8As RzabY9w0dalBFsHeD/BltgGB3mQQ1PPPCgL1t/zVxu69CpWsFEAvYIXSJt/+Ti0Zqfco cfqAs4hEeQfO2U/ZhA5ZDVw60Y3ZhM3oNM7K8= Received: by 10.142.193.7 with SMTP id q7mr318326wff.39.1285119522526; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 18:38:42 -0700 (PDT) X-BeenThere: lojban@googlegroups.com Received: by 10.142.55.16 with SMTP id d16ls1048620wfa.2.p; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 18:38:41 -0700 (PDT) Received: by 10.142.207.11 with SMTP id e11mr2300222wfg.47.1285119521806; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 18:38:41 -0700 (PDT) Received: by 10.142.207.11 with SMTP id e11mr2300221wfg.47.1285119521774; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 18:38:41 -0700 (PDT) Received: from cdptpa-omtalb.mail.rr.com (cdptpa-omtalb.mail.rr.com [75.180.132.122]) by gmr-mx.google.com with ESMTP id s33si11220374wfc.4.2010.09.21.18.38.41; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 18:38:41 -0700 (PDT) Received-SPF: neutral (google.com: 75.180.132.122 is neither permitted nor denied by best guess record for domain of phma@phma.optus.nu) client-ip=75.180.132.122; X-Authority-Analysis: v=1.1 cv=88hQlV/VnhrPhhPadeRuWHBNMc0qRjlK2a7+9yZesI4= c=1 sm=0 a=wPDyFdB5xvgA:10 a=8nJEP1OIZ-IA:10 a=9o99xeNKNPYSmM5t9x5+TQ==:17 a=GUGWOcxdAAb7kQZ_55QA:9 a=SWxWmpq84xIenYuQ7M9x92TzXDIA:4 a=wPNLvfGTeEIA:10 a=9o99xeNKNPYSmM5t9x5+TQ==:117 X-Cloudmark-Score: 0 X-Originating-IP: 75.176.118.168 Received: from [75.176.118.168] ([75.176.118.168:53413] helo=chausie) by cdptpa-oedge01.mail.rr.com (envelope-from ) (ecelerity 2.2.3.46 r()) with ESMTP id 2A/83-29299-02E599C4; Wed, 22 Sep 2010 01:38:41 +0000 Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by chausie (Postfix) with ESMTP id 642346DCE for ; Tue, 21 Sep 2010 21:38:39 -0400 (EDT) From: Pierre Abbat To: lojban@googlegroups.com Subject: Re: [lojban] reklesi Date: Tue, 21 Sep 2010 21:38:30 -0400 User-Agent: KMail/1.9.6 (enterprise 0.20070907.709405) References: In-Reply-To: MIME-Version: 1.0 Message-Id: <201009212138.33185.phma@phma.optus.nu> X-Original-Sender: phma@phma.optus.nu X-Original-Authentication-Results: gmr-mx.google.com; spf=neutral (google.com: 75.180.132.122 is neither permitted nor denied by best guess record for domain of phma@phma.optus.nu) smtp.mail=phma@phma.optus.nu Reply-To: lojban@googlegroups.com Precedence: list Mailing-list: list lojban@googlegroups.com; contact lojban+owners@googlegroups.com List-ID: List-Post: , List-Help: , List-Archive: Sender: lojban@googlegroups.com List-Subscribe: , List-Unsubscribe: , Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1 Content-Disposition: inline On Tuesday 21 September 2010 18:22:52 Remo Dentato wrote: > Hi there, I finally manged to put online the draft version of the > prologue of "TwoKinds". > > You might notice I've introduced some "syntatic sugar" to help fit the > text into the baloon. The final version will have a note at the > begininng explaining those conventions and some words that are > specifically coined for the comic (as Keidran, for example). > > Suggestions, feedback and criticism are always welcome. p. 2: "mi bu'u ma" is "I where" (it is grammatical, but in the way an answer to a double question is). I'd say "mi zvati ma". Similarly "mi me'e ma" -> "ma cmene mi". p. 3: "ma ninmu", on the foliage, doesn't correspond to anything in the original. "mi bu'u vi zutse" is a double time tense; I'd say "mi zutse ti" or "mi stali ti". "hide" here means not "se cacher/esconderse" (I guess that's what you meant by "pifrivbi") but "cuir/cuero" (I've forgotten what Italian I used to know). I'd say "do manci lo du'u pleji da'i makau fo lo simsa be do skapi". p. 4: "e'o ko dicra lo nu raktu ti nixli" means "Please interrupt a girl of the disturbing-this type." I'm not sure what you meant, but "ju'i do ko na raktu ti" is closer to the original. "mi kakne lo nu pilno ti xacyba'e" means "I can a using-this sword". I think you mean "mi kakne lo nu pilno ti noi xacyba'e" or "...pilno le vi xacyba'e". "ko troci ma" is "Try to do what!?" (command and question together). I'm not sure how to translate it, but it's something like "do troci ba'e ma" or "do zukte fi ba'e ma". "mi pamoi lo'i viska be ny" should be "... be ky" (since it's a kreidanu) or "... be ta". p. 5: "dispatch" is, I think, a euphemism for "kill". I think "vicious" is more "vlile" than "palci", but then I don't know how much moral sense kreidans have. p. 6: "fesli'a" means "leave trash". Just "cliva" is what you want. Pierre -- I believe in Yellow when I'm in Sweden and in Black when I'm in Wales. -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "lojban" group. To post to this group, send email to lojban@googlegroups.com. To unsubscribe from this group, send email to lojban+unsubscribe@googlegroups.com. 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