From lojban+bncCJ2UzZHuDRDV_v_nBBoE4je0dA@googlegroups.com Wed Dec 08 13:57:57 2010 Received: from mail-ww0-f61.google.com ([74.125.82.61]) by chain.digitalkingdom.org with esmtp (Exim 4.72) (envelope-from ) id 1PQS1J-0000a0-IM; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:57 -0800 Received: by wwb34 with SMTP id 34sf1303607wwb.16 for ; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:46 -0800 (PST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=googlegroups.com; s=beta; h=domainkey-signature:received:x-beenthere:received:received:received :received:received-spf:received:mime-version:received:received :in-reply-to:references:date:message-id:subject:from:to :x-original-sender:x-original-authentication-results:reply-to :precedence:mailing-list:list-id:list-post:list-help:list-archive :sender:list-subscribe:list-unsubscribe:content-type; bh=l+e9DzYU8vPOgkGjyY85hDcTzXf3sdY2CHJeSsMwJiY=; b=4X1qJzfc2Sey/DP0BQ+hD/dKpgoc7jbTRFqTDCxu54aYZZU+5N8JzIu9nnwmFTue8X DFhCGTwwYoST/6lC7ZSrHiS2r61D5j+paKXPauBgoe5SJYcwEsbao7O2fKBIq1FrtklB Ka0e6pWCA3ASfu7G9aelzw1t3IqccTyOQ/4jk= DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; c=nofws; d=googlegroups.com; s=beta; h=x-beenthere:received-spf:mime-version:in-reply-to:references:date :message-id:subject:from:to:x-original-sender :x-original-authentication-results:reply-to:precedence:mailing-list :list-id:list-post:list-help:list-archive:sender:list-subscribe :list-unsubscribe:content-type; b=PEoipS+FCJ1Gfh22w6UIGDk/JeXh+QM3ty8ck1XH5x8FbWZYRA0G87Trsv4qv6iW4j rKVNaMpEXeIYFacI5wX0p8AJGJaoOOD7yKa+lXsIYQ4ACOit+XSdK7g4XvN1QtPwFJSC VDNhz0jlIZvSH9khSlgxUxlaUyu4oqyZoeRBE= Received: by 10.216.174.2 with SMTP id w2mr238989wel.10.1291845461721; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:41 -0800 (PST) X-BeenThere: lojban@googlegroups.com Received: by 10.216.62.75 with SMTP id x53ls485383wec.3.p; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:40 -0800 (PST) Received: by 10.216.36.12 with SMTP id v12mr141710wea.7.1291845460597; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:40 -0800 (PST) Received: by 10.216.36.12 with SMTP id v12mr141709wea.7.1291845460573; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:40 -0800 (PST) Received: from mail-wy0-f169.google.com (mail-wy0-f169.google.com [74.125.82.169]) by gmr-mx.google.com with ESMTP id m20si116367weq.11.2010.12.08.13.57.39; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:39 -0800 (PST) Received-SPF: pass (google.com: domain of jjllambias@gmail.com designates 74.125.82.169 as permitted sender) client-ip=74.125.82.169; Received: by wyj26 with SMTP id 26so1593347wyj.14 for ; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:39 -0800 (PST) MIME-Version: 1.0 Received: by 10.227.127.79 with SMTP id f15mr9568222wbs.86.1291845457986; Wed, 08 Dec 2010 13:57:37 -0800 (PST) Received: by 10.227.54.72 with HTTP; Wed, 8 Dec 2010 13:57:37 -0800 (PST) In-Reply-To: References: Date: Wed, 8 Dec 2010 18:57:37 -0300 Message-ID: Subject: Re: [lojban] Another children's book From: =?ISO-8859-1?Q?Jorge_Llamb=EDas?= To: lojban@googlegroups.com X-Original-Sender: jjllambias@gmail.com X-Original-Authentication-Results: gmr-mx.google.com; spf=pass (google.com: domain of jjllambias@gmail.com designates 74.125.82.169 as permitted sender) smtp.mail=jjllambias@gmail.com; dkim=pass (test mode) header.i=@gmail.com Reply-To: lojban@googlegroups.com Precedence: list Mailing-list: list lojban@googlegroups.com; contact lojban+owners@googlegroups.com List-ID: List-Post: , List-Help: , List-Archive: Sender: lojban@googlegroups.com List-Subscribe: , List-Unsubscribe: , Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1 On Wed, Dec 8, 2010 at 6:01 PM, Remo Dentato wrote: > I've posted the initial translation of another children book here: > http://www.dentato.com/dinsauru-review.pdf > > I'm still waiting for the author to give me the authorization to post > the translation on the lojban.org site but in the meantime any > feedback is greatly welcome. The author's surname looks like a Spanish surname ("robles" means "oaks" in Spanish). Are you just guessing at the pronunciation? What's with all those "pa" instead of "lo" in the translation? Does the original really use "one" rather than "a"? For example, "i pa mela .pterodon. ka'e vofli gi'e bevri mi roda noi mi nelci" says that there's one (and only one) pterosaur that can do that. But if one can do it, why couldn't any other? Most of the other "pa" have similar issues. Also, I think you want "poi" there, not "noi", unless he is saying he likes every place. And similarly in "le gerku noi mi mutce terpa". "selpi'o" -> "se pi'o" "lo girzu be leka mela .paxitcefalosaurus." sounds strange, but I can't blame you for paying attention to the definition of "girzu". I would probably have used "gunma" or "bende". mu'o mi'e xorxes -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "lojban" group. To post to this group, send email to lojban@googlegroups.com. To unsubscribe from this group, send email to lojban+unsubscribe@googlegroups.com. For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/lojban?hl=en.