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On Sunday 03 April 2011 20:33:23 mirhagk wrote:
> Hey I'm new to lojban and just for practice/fun I wrote a tiny little
> short story (more of a paragraph lol). Can someone please proofread it
> or something? (The english is in brackets above each sentence so you
> know kinda what I wanted to say)
>
> [The wolf]
> le lapno

le labno

> [the wolf crept over the hill]
> .i le lapno ku cpare lo derxi

.i le labno ku cpare lo cmama'a

"derxi" means "pile, heap". "cmama'a" means "small mountain", i.e. "hill".

> [he looks over the valley and selects his prey]
> .i go'i fe selcta fa lo ma'arbi'i ku .e cuxna le go'i pe lo se kalte

.i ly. catlu lo ma'arbi'i gi'e cuxna lo se kalte be ly.

"go'i" repeats the previous predicate, not the previous sumti. You can also 
use any of the ko'a series instead of "ly", but if you do, you should state 
its referent with "goi".

> [slowly moving towards his prey]
> .i masno muvdu le go'i pe lo se kalte

.i masno muvdu lo se kalte be ly.

> [he prepares to punce]
> .i bregau fi lo gunta

.i brebi'o lo nu gunta

"bregau" means that the wolf makes something else (which goes in x2) 
ready. "gunta" means "attack". I don't know "punce". Did you mean "pulce" 
(dust)?

> [he reaches his prey and kills it]
> .i mulkla le go'i pe lo se kalte .e catra ti

.i mulkla lo se kalte gi'e catra ri

mu'omi'e .pier.
-- 
Jews use a lunisolar calendar; Muslims use a solely lunar calendar.

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