"Seizing my life in your hands,
you trashed it clean on the
savage rocks of Eternal Mind."
A piece of a poem, which I translated as:
do noi jgari le mi jmive le do xance
pu darxi fi jy. ja'e jy. cu jinsa
fe le cilce rokci po'e le cimni menli
1.Is my translation grammatically correct?
2.Do I need 'ku'o' at the end of 'noi...'? Or does the 'pu' close off everything ?
3.Anything else I could have done better, or more elegantly?
How would you have done it?
Thanks,
Tom |