[lojban-beginners] Tao translation

[HeliodoR <exitconsole@gmail.com>]

Eh, hit a wrong button. *slaps the forehead*

 

So I just felt like translating this little part of "Tao Te Ching" to Lojban:

 

.i le jmive cu tolci'o ca'o citno
.i le go'i cu fapro le saxysidbo
.i seki'ubo le go'i cu lirymro

 

The living [people] are [sometimes] already old as young,

they oppose against the harmony-concept [the Way, tao],

and so they pass [too] early.

 

And the rhythm should go:

. . -  . . -  . .  . .  - -

. . -  . . -  . .  . .  - -

. . -  . .  . . -  . .  - -

 

It is the final lines of chapter 30 and 55 if I remember well.

Okay, that last line is not perfect, but I couldn't quite make it better.

What do You think? Corrections? (Can the lujvo be {saxysidbo} at all?)

 

mi'e xiLI,odor.

P.S.: No, I do not speak Chinese, I read this from the Hungarian translation. :-\

Does anyone here know Chinese to compare the translation with the original phrase?