coi / gramr corections plese?

[Andrew Heathwaite <gtrpkt@yahoo.com>]

.i coi roda mi'e .andros.

...and in English, hi, I'm Andrew.

First of all, I hope this is an appropriate request to make on this
email list.  If not, I hope someone will set me straight.

I've been teaching myself Lojban for the past month or so.  I've
almost completed _Lojban For Beginners_, and I'm planning to buy _The
Complete Lojban Language_ sometime in the near future.  I'm serious
about it; you should see my boxes of flashcards.  I've fallen in love
with Lojban, and I want to become fluent and write songs in it.  I
have started an online journal for practicing Lojban, and I was
wondering if somebody experienced with the language would be
interested in reading over my little writings and offering
corrections and suggestions.

I know that my stories are pointless and bebna; you don't have to
tell me that.  I just want to know:

(A) Am I using grammar correctly?
(B) Does what I'm writing make sense?
(C) If not A or not B, what can I do to fix it?

I'd appreciate any help of that nature.  It's not good for me to
practice bad grammar.  If I have misconceptions about how things are
supposed to work, I'd like to know sooner rather than later.

I don't know if this email list is the right place for responses to
these questions, since I am new to it.  I'd like to suggest that if
you have responses to my writings you use the comments feature of my
blog.  It's easy to do, and you don't have to register.

So here is the link to my blog:

http://androslojban.blogspot.com/

Thank you so much in advance!

.i .io ki'e mu'o

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