Re: [lojban] 3 loafs

[Ivan A Derzhanski <iad@math.bas.bg>]

From: Ivan A Derzhanski <iad@math.bas.bg>

sklyanin@pdmi.ras.ru wrote:
> This is my first translation exercise. It is a fable
> "Tri kalacha i odna baranka" (Three loa[ve]s and one bagel)
[...]
> The Lojban translation:
> 
> [1] lo pa nanmu cu xagji
> [2] .i te vecnu lo pa barda bliku be lo nanba gi'e citka
> [3] .i ku'i ca'o xagji

I'd abbreviate {lo pa} to either just {lo} or just {pa}.
{ca'o xagji} `he is continuously hungry': doesn't {co'unai}
get the point across better?

> [4] .i te vecnu lo remoi bliku gi'e citka
> [5] .i ku'i ca'o xagji
> [6] .i te vecnu lo cimoi bliku gi'e citka
> [7] .i ku'i ca'o xagji

How do we say `one more' (English `another one') in Lojban?

> [8] .i baku te vecnu loi cmalu djine nanba
>     .ije ba le nu citka lo pa djine kei co'u xagji
> [9] .i baku le nanmu cu darxi le stedu le xance gi'e cusku lu

[9] doesn't really need a connective, but if you want one,
I think I'd make it causal rather than temporal.

> [10] .oi mi bebna

Better make the whole thing a complex attitudinal.
The chap isn't really complaining, he's expressing
annoyance/frustration of an intellectual sort (the
{ro'V} series).

> [11] .i .uinai mi pu fesygau le ba'e so'i nanba ki'u ma

A rhetorical question in the original.  It may not be a
good idea to phrase it as a question in the translation.
All he's doing is state that he's eaten (too) many loaves
in vain.

> [12] .i .ei mi pu gasnu le nu le pa cmalu djine
>  cu pamoi le'i se citka be mi li'u

I don't quite see why you make him say that he did {gasnu} that.
It's those modalities again.  The original goes `I should (just)
have eaten a bagel straight away', which amounts to `In a world
where I act (or things in general go) in the best possible way,
which is a world different from the actual one, I ate(*) a bagel
as soon as I was hungry'.

(*) Past time, different axis.  The form is awkward in English,
but we're talking meta-English here.

-- 
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 wa-as-sayfu wa-ar-rum.hu wa-al-qir.tAsu wa-al-qalamu>
                       (Abu t-Tayyib Ahmad Ibn Hussayn al-Mutanabbi)
Ivan A Derzhanski                     <http://www.math.bas.bg/~iad/>
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W: Dept for Math Lx, Inst for Maths & CompSci, Bulg Acad of Sciences

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