Re: [lojban] limerick

[Warrigal <ihope127+w@gmail.com>]

On Mon, Jul 26, 2010 at 2:24 PM, Luke Bergen <lukeabergen@gmail.com> wrote:
> puzuvu zasti fa lo nanmu
> poi ponse lo cmalu danlu
> .i ri ze'e sipna
> gi'e mutce citka
> doi mlatu plixau fi su'o da xu

You really should indicate the cmavo stress when you do that.

puZUvu zasti fa lo nanmu
poi ponse lo cmalu danlu
.i RI ze'e sipna
gi'E mutce citka
doi mlatu plixau fi su'O da xu

Of course, for it to be a perfect limerick (every third beat
stressed), it would have to be this, which is incorrect:

puZUvu zaSTI fa lo NANmu
poi PONse lo CMAlu . DANlu
.i RI ze'e SIPna
gi'E mutce CITka
doi MLAtu pliXAU fi su'O da xu

So the last line is not too long at all, but you have two brivla
stressed on the wrong syllable (and one not stressed at all), and an
awkward pause in line two. You can sort of fudge the stress by, say,
making the first syllable higher-pitched and the second syllable
louder, but eh.

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