[lojban] la lojbo kurji

[".alyn.post." <alyn.post@lodockikumazvati.org>]

I've written an oath for myself regarding Lojban.  This stretched my
fluency a bit, so I'd like some feedback on how I might make it
better.

  ni'o mi me la lojbo kurji
  .i mi ca nupre lo za'i go'o kei mi .e la lojbo kurji
  .i mi ba tavla fo la lobjan. de'i lo ro djedi
  .i mi ba jmina lo cnino nupre lo vi nupre
  .i ganai mi tavla fi no da de'i lo cabdei gi mi tavla fi lo vi nupre

Any obvious and glaring problems?  What about subtle ones?

-Alan
-- 
.i ko djuno fi le do sevzi

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