[lojban-beginners] Debug my propaganda?

["Karl Naylor" <karl.org@gmail.com>]

Hi,

So I have a habit of bugging my friends about Lojban, and just now I
posted the following message and (partially idiomatic) English
translation on a web forum we all use.  Mostly its purpose was for me
to play around a little and attempt to nudge people into reading up on
Lojban, but having written this, I thought I'd post it here for the
experts to pick apart; maybe suggest more Lojbanic forms of
expression, tell me whether {mu'i} would have been preferable to
{ki'u} and so on.

I was also quite pleased that the English translation came out
slightly longer than the Lojban :)

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pavo jeftu cu temci lenu mi co'a tadni la lojban. .ije mi ca ka'e
casnu so'o sampu bau ly. .i ki'u lenu mi na'e tcetoi tadni kei
la'edi'u joi la'ede'u cu xamgu pe'i .i .au da'i su'o pendo be mi cu
bazi co'a tadni .i seri'abo da'i mi'a ka'e tavla bau la lojban. vau
.ui .i zo'o mi dapma le rodo ka tolcando

...

It's 14 weeks since I started studying Lojban, and I can discuss some
simple stuff in the language. Since I've not been trying very hard I
think that's pretty good. It'd be cool if at least one friend of mine
started learning soon, then we could speak Lojban together [happy
sound]. Damn all of your busy-ness ;)

mu'o mi'e .karl.