[lojban-beginners] Re: Debug my propaganda?

["Turniansky, Michael" <MICHAEL.A.TURNIANSKY@saic.com>]

  At the risk of making my own mistakes and looking stupid again:

Karl Naylor:
> ---
> 
> pavo jeftu cu temci lenu mi co'a tadni la lojban. 
> 

pavo jeftu means 14 one-week periods.  Also, since jeftu already talks
about an event in the x1 place, you might like this:

lenu mi tadni la lojban cu jeftu li pavo  (or if you want to keep your
original word order:  li pavo cu se jeftu lenu mi tadni la lojban (note
that I've also dropped the co'a since I'm now asserting you've studied
lojban for a 14-week period).


>.ije mi ca ka'e  casnu so'o sampu bau ly.

  Ungrammatical as it stands (I like to run everything I send out
through jbofi'e to make sure it at least passes that level of processing
(although jbofi'e will give a false negative on some constructions, as
it likes a bit more "ku"s than are strictly necessary).  "ije"=>".ijebo"
Also, while the rest is fine as is, since tavla already has a language
and subject component, you might consider .ijebo mi ca ka'e tavla fi
so'o sampu ly


> i ki'u lenu mi na'e tcetoi tadni kei la'edi'u joi la'ede'u cu xamgu
pe'i

  Fine.


>.i .au da'i su'o pendo be mi cu bazi co'a tadni

   I think it's okay, but I'm not sure if the da'i adds much to it.

>.i seri'abo da'i mi'a ka'e tavla bau la lojban. vau  .ui 

  Yes, you want mu'i ot seri'a here, because you are talking about why
_you want_ them to learn it.  Here, you probably do want to use casnu,
not tavla because you are expressing a desire to talk with the other
person (At least, I assume that's what you are trying to convey):
imu'ibo mi'a ka'e casnu bau la lojban. You might also try .imu'ibo mi
ka'e tavla py fo la lojban ui (remembering that tavla already has a
language piece in it). The vau is not needed in either case.

> .i zo'o mi dapma le rodo ka tolcando

  Ungrammatical.  You want either .i zo'o mi dapma le le rodo ka
tolcando (you damn the property being busy of all of your audience) or
.i zo'o mi dapma ro le do ka tolcando (you damn the entire quantity of
being busy of your audience).  Not sure which you are going for here...

 


> ...
> 
> It's 14 weeks since I started studying Lojban, and I can discuss some
> simple stuff in the language. Since I've not been trying very hard I
> think that's pretty good. It'd be cool if at least one friend of mine
> started learning soon, then we could speak Lojban together [happy
> sound]. Damn all of your busy-ness ;)
> 
> mu'o mi'e .karl.
> 
                  --gejyspa