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[lojban-beginners] Re: Please review #002



  Komfo:

On 4/20/07, Turniansky, Michael <MICHAEL.A.TURNIANSKY@saic.com> wrote:

_le_ mi mamta pu klama _tezu'e lo nu_ _te_ vecnu _loi_ plise ja najnimre
jisra (or "loi jisra be plise ja najnimre") _ca le nu_ la .djeikob stali
le zdani .i mi ba _te_ vecnu _loi_ jikru _ba'o le nu my xruti_


The parenthetical is missing a {lo}. Otherwise this is good. I would do a few things slightly differently, to wit:

lo mamta be mi pu klama te zu'e lo nu terve'u lo jisra be lo plise ja najnimre ca lo nu la .djeikyb. stali lo zdani .i mi ba terve'u lo jikru ba'o lo nu lo go'i cu xrukla

I would suggest running every composition through jboski or jbofi'e. When I was a beginner, a few months of doing that completely cured me of "rookie" mistakes like missing {cu}, dropping abstractions, & the like.
mu'o mi'e komfo,amonan

 

         If that was addressed to me, komfo,amonan, I usually do.  I was particularly rushed on Friday, to get home.  (As far as the rest goes, I wanted to change Andrew’s existing words as little as possible)

 

                    --gejyspa