[lojban] Re: Text for beginners - chrestomathy part 1

[GREGORY DYKE <lojban-out@lojban.org>]

cu'u la .adam.loprest.

> Good story.  

Credits go to John Cowan for the story :) I just did the editing

> So now you've 
> got {cikybi'o}
> and {tisygau} in the story, but don't have the rafsi {cik} (from 
> {cikna}) or
> {tis} (from {tisna}) in the rafsi section of the word list.  Also the
> definitions of {cliva} and {cilmo} are incorrect (looks like they 
> just got
> copied and not updated).  

Ok. I remembered to add gau and bi'o, but forgot tis and cik. I didn't 
bother writing an automatic wordlist maker yet, so some of my copy 
pasting messed up.

And as you say, {dukse no'e galtu} just 
> doesn't seem
> right. 

In the traditional story as I remember it, it had too many cushions or 
something. I suppose John's intent was that while being no'e galtu to 
map onto the no'e cribe, it was still too high for goldilocks.

John - it seems that you really have the last word on this one...

 {sipna} doesn't 
> have a place for
> location, so you'd need something like {sipna bu'u le mi ckana} 
> (or something
> wonky like {sipna sepi'o le mi ckana} or {sipna co te ckana zo'e 
> pe mi}).  

Damn!!!! I don't know how I'm ever going to get a 10000 word piece into 
publishable form!!!!! Thankyou!!! 


I guess my only 
> other comment
> is stylistically, I'm not as fond of the modal tags, particularly 
> in places
> like that, where things get a bit deeply nested.  I'd tend to go 
> for {.i ri
> prane le ka galtu .i seki'ubo ko'u zutse le ko'i stizu .iku'i 
> seri'abo ri
> porpi}.  

xorxes made the same comment - suggesting that the others may well have 
been just plain wrong. Unless John is reading this and has convincing 
arguments to the contrary, I'll do this change...

I think your choices among mu'i, 
> ki'u, and ri'a
> are all correct, at least as far as I can tell.

I still don't, I'll check over them this evening...