Re: [lojban] Re: New Translation

[Robin Lee Powell <rlpowell@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>]

The answer to most of you questions is "Becasue I didn't think of it.".
8)

Thanks for your help.

On Fri, Mar 16, 2001 at 08:54:16PM -0000, jjllambias@hotmail.com wrote:
> 
> la camgusmis cusku di'e
> 
> > I've added another song translation to my lojban page
> > (http://www.csclub.uwaterloo.ca/~rlpowell/lojban.html).
> > 
> > I'm pretty proud of this one, because the syllable count is the >
> > same as the English.  A lot of specificity is lost, though.
> > Comments appreciated.
> 
> >>  The Sun was born, so it shall die, le solri cu jbena jovmro
> 
> I don't think I could ever figure out that meaning without seeing the
> original. I'm not sure I can give any meaning to {jovmro}. Besides
> {jo} is not about cause and effect. Maybe something just a little bit
> less cryptic (keeping syllable count):
> 
>   la sol purjbeja'e bavmro

Didn't think of la sol, actually.  Although I think I prefer:

la sol purjberi'a bavmro

> >>  so only shadows comfort me. mi po'o kufra le ctino
> 
> That's "only me", not "only shadows". It should be
> 
>    mi kufra le po'o ctino

Changed that since then, actually:

semu'i mi ctino kufra

Decided 'so' was more important than 'only'.

> >>  I know in darkness I will find you giving up inside like me. mi
> >>  djuno je nermanfacki le nu do cripa'asmi mi
> 
> I couldn't figure out {mermanfacki} or {cripa'asmi}. I propose
> re-wording to get the meaning across instead of sticking to the words:
> 
>     se'o do mi ba dunli le nu pa'acri vi le manku    

_Totally_ didn't think of se'o.  Thanks, that rocks.

> >>  Each day shall end as it begins le djefa'o du le djecfa
> 
> Is that really the meaning? That the day ends at its beginning? To me
> it is not identifying beginning and end, only saying that just as
> there is a beginning there must also be an end.
> 
>      fanmo ro djedi poi cfari

<nod>  Thanks.

> >>  and though you're far away from me .ije do selmuknarda'o
> 
> Again [selmuknarda'o} is very obscure. Why not just:
> 
>     i mu'inai do darno mi

Umm, I don't know.  8)  The .i is fixable:

.oi mu'inai do darno mi

-Robin

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