[lojban] Re: Can you read this and tell me if it is correct?

[Minimiscience <minimiscience@gmail.com>]

de'i li 09 pi'e 09 pi'e 2008 la'o fy. arpgme .fy. cusku zoi skamyxatra.
> Can you read this and tell me if it is correct?
.skamyxatra

First of all, you need to remember that sentences in Lojban *always* need to be
separated with "{.i}" (or "{ni'o}/{no'i}").  Whitespace doesn't count.  Also,
due to the frequent lack of grammar, I had to guess at most of what you were
trying to say and offered possible corrected translations for those meanings.

> fanmo fe lo carvi .i jarco fe dilnu 
You left out a "{lo}/{loi}/{le}/{lei}" before "{dilnu}."  Also, as there is no
{sumti} before these sentences' {selbri}, the x1 place is implicitly filled by
"{zo'e}," so it's not necessary to label the next place with "{fe}."

> le solri capu'o jarco le nenli'i pe le solri
> ki'u mi tatpi mi kanla punli
I'm not sure what you're tring to say here.  Assuming that the second line is a
separate sentence and that "{ki'u}" (which means "because of reason/
justification") is a typo for "{ku'i}" ("however"), it appears that you're
trying to say something about your swollen eyes being tired, but it comes out
as something nongrammatical & somewhat nonsensical.  If you are trying to say,
"My swollen eyes are tired," that would be something closer to "{lo mi punli
kanla cu tatpi}."

> ku'i mi viska lo tsani
> tsani melbi
Literally, the second line translates as "(Observe) Sky-beautiful."  If you're
trying to say that the sky is beautiful, that would be "{lo tsani cu melbi}."

> mi ba cunso fe le cabna
"I *will* be random at the *present* time"?  While grammatical, that seems
semantically suspect.  Also, the "{fe}" here is unnecessary.

> ki'u le cabna ba cfari balvi 
Assuming that the "{ki'u}" here is actually supposed to mean "because of
reason" and is connected to the line before it (This is what happens when you
don't delimit your sentences as required), "{le cabna ba cfari balvi}" needs to
be made into a single {sumti} consisting of an abstraction; i.e., follow the
"{ki'u}" with "{le nu}."  Also, you might want to rethink your wording here;
perhaps "{le cabna co'a balvi}"?

> bancu mu nanca levi seljdi ba vajninai
If you're trying to say "after 5 years," use "{ba}" instead of "{bancu}," and
you can then probably get rid of the "{ba}" later in the sentence.  Secondly,
I'm pretty sure that you can't attach "{nai}" to a {selbri}; "not important"
would be "{na'e vajni}" (or "{na vajni}," but I don't think that's what you're
trying to get across).

> ja'e mi prami le cabna
Again, you need to make the {bridi} into an abstraction {sumti} with "{le nu}."
Either that or change "{ja'e} to "{.ija'ebo}."

> .ijanai mi le djica fasnunai
"...if my desire does not happen" is "{.ijanai le se djica be mi na fasnu}."
Also, I'm not sure whether the result of your desire not happening is meant to
be the sentence before or the sentence after.  Currently, it's the sentence
before.  To make it the sentence after, one way would be to change "{.ijanai}"
to "{.iganai}" and replace the "{.i}" between this sentence and the next with
"{gi}."

> mi xenrunai balvi
Again, you can't attach "{nai}" to a {selbri}.  Also, assuming that you mean to
say "I do not rue the future," that would be "{mi na xenru lo balvi}."

> mi farlu cumki ku'i viska fe le jvinu
"I can fall; however, I would see the view" (assuming that's what you mean)
would be something like "{lenu mi farlu cu cumki .i ku'i mi viska le jvinu}"
(Someone else should probably confirm the second part).

> mi litru fe le jvinu
You travel with the view as your route?  (Also, the "{fe}" is still
unnecessary.)

> .ijanai mi pu sfani
> mi djica mi le djica  fasnu
"I want my desire to happen" is "{mi djica lenu le se djica be mi fasnu}."

> mi le djica 
> ba fasnu
As before, "my desire" is "{le se djica be mi}."

> mi ba jdice cumkinai balvi
My best guess for what you're trying to say here is "I will decide on an
impossible future," which would be something like "{mi ba jdice tu'a lo to'e
cumki balvi}."

> cabna mi djica prami
"Now I desire love" is "{caku mi djica loka prami}."

> mi cadzu ce'o mi cinba do
I'm pretty sure that all this needs is a "{.i}" before the "{ce'o}."

> do cinba mi ce'o mi gleki
Again, you need a "{.i}" before the "{ce'o}."

> mi ba cunso fe le cabna
> ki'u le cabna ba cfari balvi 
> bancu mu nanca levi seljdi ba vajninai
> ja'e mi prami le cabna
> mi ba cunso fe le cabna
> ki'u le cabna ba cfari balvi 
> bancu mu nanca levi seljdi ba vajninai
> ja'e mi prami le cabna
See my comments for the first use of these lines above.

> Thank you, I wrote this with help of the dictionary.
I think you should spend more time studying the grammar.

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