On Thu, Oct 7, 2010 at 2:32 PM, .alyn.post.For an oath "nu'e" is better than "mi ca nupre". You are not reporting
<alyn.post@lodockikumazvati.org> wrote:
> I've written an oath for myself regarding Lojban. This stretched my
> fluency a bit, so I'd like some feedback on how I might make it
> better.
>
> ni'o mi me la lojbo kurji
> .i mi ca nupre lo za'i go'o kei mi .e la lojbo kurji
that someone (in this case yourself) is making a promise. You are
actually making the promise.
So "nu'e mi .e la lojbo kurji do'u go'o".
"lo ro djedi" is not a date, you want "ca" not "de'i".
> .i mi ba tavla fo la lobjan. de'i lo ro djedi
And "ca ro (lo) djedi", unless you are content to do it at some single
point in time valid for all days.
> .i mi ba jmina lo cnino nupre lo vi nupre"Add a new oath-taker to this here oath-taker"?
If you mean "a new commitment to this commitment" then its "lo cnino
se nupre lo dei se nupre", but maybe you are promising to add adepts,
I don't know.
"ca lo cabdei"
> .i ganai mi tavla fi no da de'i lo cabdei gi mi tavla fi lo vi nupre
So, either you talk about something, or you talk about yourself?
mu'o mi'e xorxes