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[lojban-beginners] Re: feedback please



peter hering wrote:
> .i se fulta le cpina litki lo ba'e so'i morsi cinki

This seems to mean, that the liquid floats on the dead flies. While this could
be a neat stylistic device (so many dead flies, that the liquid itself was
swimming in fly corpses), it seems like that wasn't intended. The cause for this
is, that if you put no sumti before the selbri, the first sumti after it is
assigned into the x2 slot, which is the x1 slot of fulta.


> .i mi kucli le si'o xu se cumki le nu mau re remyma'utei cu ka'e jmive ne'i
> le feska'e dakli

In this case, for the si'o, a relative question would be more sensible to me,
which is easily accomplished by appending kau to the xu.

I'm not sure, wether the word remyma'utei is appropriate here, as you don't talk
about humans, but flies.

The rest of the text seems absolutely fine to me after having read it once ;)
  - Timo

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