[lojban-beginners] Re: Seizing my life

[tijlan <jbotijlan@gmail.com>]

2009/6/10 Tom Gysel <to_mu1975@yahoo.com>:
> so, i rewrite to:
> do darxi fi ny. ja'e le nu ny. cu jinsa
>
> And if I write:
> do darxi fi ny. ja'e le nu jinsa
> can people think it is 'do' that is clean? or do they know its 'le ny.' ?

('le ny.' is not a valid sumti.)

It might be a little slippery because another 'nu' follows in the same
sentence i.e. 'le nu jinsa'. Changing it to 'ny.jy.' wouldn't make a
difference either, because both 'nu jmive' and 'nu jinsa' are
'ny.jy.'. Why not 'ra'?

The x3 of 'darxi' sounds more like an instrument; you hit the rocks
with it ('my life') and it's still in your hands. But the original
poem doesn't sound like that; you throw it onto the rocks and it
leaves your hands. So 'renro' seems more apt. With 'renro' you can
also leave out 'fi'.

mu'o mi'e tijlan